KEYWORDS
exchange / access / partnership / solution / creative / innovative / example / benefit / community
CONCEPTS
- O+ is a three-day art and music festival in Kingston, NY.
- unifying a community with a robust cultural experience
- providing a creative and innovative solution to inaccessible health care
- to bring music, art, culture, and information into Kingston through a grassroots effort of community members
- opening the door to existing health resources
- connecting people directly with the health care they need.
- In exchange for enhancing Kingston’s cultural collateral with quality art and music, artists and musicians will receive access to knowledge, diagnosis, resources, and free and discounted medical/dental/wellness services from participating local health care providers.
- In the now, Kingston enjoys a beautiful weekend of culture, and its creative constituency with limited access to health care is cared for. In the long run, our community puts forth an innovative example
- how art, music and medicine can come together in a serviceable union.
- Connecting artists directly with resources
- Artists teaming up with health care providers to create a health community
- Breaking down the barriers between the medical providers and the clientele
Cultural collateral!
ReplyDeleteMISSION STATEMENT: The O Positive Festival is a three day Art & Music event held in (historic/beautiful) uptown Kingston where healthcare practitioners provide services to the Artists and Musicians in return for a robust cultural experience for all to enjoy.
ReplyDeleteIn the Executive Summary, typically a paragraph, we can go into more detail. The statement needs a better word for "services".
The O+ Festival is a creative three day Art & Music Experience held in beautiful/historic Uptown Kingston where Healthcare Providers will share their expertise and resources with the Artists and Musicians who in return will share their vision and talents for ALL in the Community to ENJOY.
ReplyDeleteYOU ARE BRINGING IT ALL TOGETHER HERE........THANKS TO ALL
THIS IS MY VERSION......ANY COMMENTS ??? RRissman
I like that "sharing" is the operative phase.
ReplyDeleteWe do need to take out the future tense of "will". It does bring up the point do we need to mention the date? Columbus Day weekend is easy to remember for annual events and the symbolism of Columbus discovering the new world and O+ Festival discovering a new way is reinforced.
We do need to decide whether we want to use "beautiful" or "historic".
The O+ Festival is a creative three day Art & Music Experience over Columbus Day weekend held in (beautiful/historic) Uptown Kingston where Healthcare Providers share their expertise and resources with the Artists and Musicians who share their vision and talents for ALL in the Community to ENJOY.
The final simplicity is beautiful. Definitely. Maybe a nod to the continued efforts of the artists despite being somewhat hamstrung.....
ReplyDelete.....resources with the Artists and Musicians who continue to share their vision and talents for ALL in the Community to ENJOY.
Arturo
Love what Randy & Peter wrote.
ReplyDeleteRe: dates: if Columbus Day Wknd is in the mission statement, need we have it on that date every year? We may want to change it up in the future... Though maybe it doesn't matter for now... But I feel like naming a specific date might make the whole thing seem really immediate and not the long term, sprawling, well-into-the-future/constant effort we're going for? Maybe?
Jesse found the definition of Health according to the WHO (the world health org, not the band):
ReplyDelete" Health is a state of complete physical, mental and social well-being and not merely the absence of disease or infirmity. "
I do believe that we can drop "beautiful/Historic" and just go with Uptown Kingston. Remember that we are also dedicated to Urban renewal and this town. I think there is no need to add any description to the neighborhood. Just saying uptown Kingston gives it a sense of place and keeps it simple.
ReplyDeleteDid we nix the line "band aid solution for artists"? I really liked that.
It took us a while to come up with this
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O+ is a music and arts festival taking place in Uptown Kingston on Oct 8th, 9th, and 10th. In return for their contributions, the artists and musicians will be provided with free healthcare from participating providers in the Kingston community. O+ aims to create an alternative model to the way in which people access healthcare by removing the barrier between the provider and the recipient.
creative is probably redundant if you say "art & music" after it, and no reason not to say festival at the outset so people don't have to intuit what the heck we're talking about. other than that, this is pretty much randy/peter's statement with joe's input and my dates qualms folded in:
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The O+ Festival is a three-day art and music festival in Uptown Kingston where health care providers share their expertise and resources with the artists and musicians, who in turn share their vision and talents for all festival attendees to enjoy. It is an innovative example of how a community can work together to support the arts and foster its own health by taking care and giving care.
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ok it gets a little sloppy in that last sentence. but i think the "providing an innovative (denise) example (dr. art)" bit we talked about last night would be great to include.
Incorporating Jesse & Tom's last sentence... I like the removing the barrier bit a lot. Maybe patient instead of recipient, is more personable?
ReplyDeleteThe O+ Festival is a three-day art and music festival in Uptown Kingston where health care providers share their expertise and resources with the artists and musicians, who in turn share their vision and talents for all festival attendees to enjoy. O+ aims to create an alternative model to the way in which people access healthcare by removing the barrier between the provider and the patient.
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I like Randy/Peter's second sentence grammar-wise, doesn't start with a prepositional phrase, is more direct... And from what I can gather, I don't think it's standard practice to include the date in the mission statement, as it will change every year and this is a broader thing... it'll will be all over everything otherwise anyway... What think you all?
The O+ Festival is a three-day art and music festival also ...share their expertise...share their vision.... This is redundant. I have the idea that O+ should stand on it's own, not attached to 'festival'.
ReplyDeleteAlso, I chose not to use "patient" because current medicine no longer identifies them as patients, patients have become "clients", which sounds weird. I liked the alliteration of provider and patient, but I think "patient" sounds a little too personal for this.
Specific dates are a good idea....I thik we read a 'when, where, what style mission statement at the meeting.... although I don't think saying "Columbus Day' ties, links, defines or obligates anyone to that holi-date on a yearly basis or to Spain's imperialism or world conquering arrogance.
ReplyDeleteI think the 'in-turn' or 'i return for' connotes/implies barter rather than mutual appreciation and sharing. I would leave it out. To keep things conceptually aligned, we should speak of sharing experience, culture and information in hopes of finding purchase on new ground for access to both for all....
So
The O+ Festival is a celebration of art and music in Uptown Kingston that also hopes to create a bridge to access health care for artists. It aims to bring life to a state of complete physical, mental and social well-being through a coalition of health care providers, community resources, and the artists in a shared vision nurturing body and soul.
Or.....
The O+ Festival is a celebration of art and music in Uptown Kingston that also aims to foster a model for complete physical, mental and social well-being. By bringing together the shared expertise and experiences of the artists, health care providers and community resources, O+ hopes to provide a venue for artistic expression and promotes appreciation of the combined contribution of all for a healthy community. It seeks to provide a new avenue for access to health for artists to sustain the needs of the entire community.
OK, so I'm running out of gas and repeating myself.....but its some alternative stuff to throw out there....a little broad, but that provides some latitude as well.....hone, cut, sharpen and shape...
share their "expertise and resources" sounds vague. i would be confused hearing that. we want the public to know these people are being properly provided for.
ReplyDeleteexpertise could include telling artists to brush and floss and resources can be a pamphlet, a toothbrush and toothpaste. These artists are getting so much more. It would also be a stronger PRESS RELEASE to include something like Comprehensive healthcare.
this is making me sleepy.
Any thoughts on adding Comp. Health Care?
Art, this one is really good! It's also fulfills our non-profit mission statement.
ReplyDeletetwo thumbs up, way up
The O+ Festival is a celebration of art and music in Uptown Kingston that also hopes to create a bridge to access health care for artists. It aims to bring life to a state of complete physical, mental and social well-being through a coalition of health care providers, community resources, and the artists in a shared vision nurturing body and soul.
sorry to come late to the editing party.
ReplyDeletei too like this iteration. the language is more visual & conceptually incorporates the "O+" as a symbol of wholeness of health & coming togetherness.
i like the image of "bridge" to healthcare. it 'stays positive' & indicates the barrier or impasse without mentioning it. yesterday i was thinking about the + sign as a "crossroads"...
"O+ is a crossroads where art, music, health & positivity meet." it sounds a bit hokey maybe.
perhaps in the more extended version something about how music & art are a kind of medicine and medicine is a kind of art. something about the healing qualities of creating & sharing.
i agree that "O+" can stand alone without festival attached. it is a festival, yes but O+ exists beyond the 3 days in october, it seems like it is happening now, as we are planning it & will continually evolve.
i removed three words: the, festival, also:
"O+ is a celebration of art and music in Uptown Kingston that hopes to create a bridge to access health care for artists. It aims to bring life to a state of complete physical, mental and social well-being through a coalition of health care providers, community resources, and the artists in a shared vision nurturing body and soul."
Very nice. Succinct and direct without being overstated while providing a good vision of mission. I hope that our familiarity with it doesn't leave others blind to the fact that it is actually called O positive (not plus) and that is a rockin' festival to boot.....
ReplyDeleteWhat say you Randy and Peter?
Comprehensive health care......I have a vague line on two things: 1. a possible non-profit co-op that artists/musicians can buy into at a deep discount. 2. previous modeled! check it out! SWEET! http://www.freelancersunion.org/
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ReplyDeletea more extended version vis-a-vis grant/non-profit app? that music and art is medicine and visa versa is a premier point, girlfriend....should that be worked in now? Mission and vision statements can be different, but related entities.....
Hi All,
ReplyDeleteI think this statement is fantastic.
"O+ is a celebration of art and music in Uptown Kingston that hopes to create a bridge to access health care for artists. It aims to bring life to a state of complete physical, mental and social well-being through a coalition of health care providers, community resources, and the artists in a shared vision nurturing body and soul."
You guys are great and have a gift for language.
I agree that we can expand this for the non-profit application.
Stay Positive
I have 6 possible changes:
ReplyDelete1) O Positive Festival is our name and O+ is our symbol
2) If we are successful we will want a three day weekend every year so I think it is important to have O+ every Columbus Day Weekend
3) I write and live in the affirmative and do not like to use the word “hope”
4) “bring to life” is another hoping word “embody” is again more affirmative
5) Changed ", and the artists" to "with the artists"
6) Changed “nurturing body” to “to nurture the body”
Lastly, does our Mission Statement pass the 10 year old test. Is it easy to understand?
I do believe in our Executive Summary we can say there will be over 20 bands and so many artists...to better explain the "give me" for the public.
MISSION STATEMENT: "O Positive Festival is a celebration of art and music in Uptown Kingston over Columbus Day Weekend that creates a bridge to access health care for artists. O+ aims to embody a state of complete physical, mental and social well-being through a coalition of health care providers, community resources with the artists in a shared vision to nurture the body and soul."
Quick fix:
ReplyDeleteChanged "health care providers, community resources" to "health care providers and community resources"
MISSION STATEMENT: "O Positive Festival is a celebration of art and music in Uptown Kingston over Columbus Day Weekend that creates a bridge to access health care for artists. O+ aims to embody a state of complete physical, mental and social well-being through a coalition of health care providers and community resources with the artists in a shared vision to nurture the body and soul."
Excellent stuff, Pedro.
ReplyDeleteUno) I like the use of both O positive and O+....self explanatory that way.
Dos) We all want a yearly and expanding festrive and it seems attractive in many ways to tie ourselves to Columbus Day, but may be too definitive and unnecessarily limiting. Life is short, grab hold tightly when we can!
Tres) Hope is subjugated to reality. Rock on.
Quatro) I LOVE the 'with'.
Cinco) The 'embody' thing is great, but is maybe an arrival. Again, just me, but I like the sense of building, creativity, process and momentum. Maybe 'manifest' or 'bring into being"? It's still nascent in a sense and I like the idea of the fulminant......Bring to life, institute, establish, and effect all have the act of creation associated. Should it also be a more available, inspirational and familiar word to a joe (no offense!) on the street person? Sort of a revolution of real blessings......
'bring to life' has some really primal appeal for me.
Man, I can't seem to the cool color thing.....so note the "The" at the beginning.....it seemed awkward without it....nit-picky I know, but that's how I roll.
"The O Positive Festival is a celebration of art and music in Uptown Kingston over Columbus Day Weekend that creates a bridge to access health care for artists. O+ aims to ......... a state of complete physical, mental and social well-being through a coalition of health care providers, community resources with the artists in a shared vision to nurture the body and soul."
OOPS, forgot to leave out the 'Columbus Day' thing.....Bonnarro don't care, why should we!
ReplyDeleteOfficial 3 day weekends are complicated by other familial and fealty types of obligations anyway. No guilt....
Maybe 'seeks to embody"?
Fuck it! Embody! STAY POSITIVE and on point......
"The O Positive Festival is a celebration of art and music in Uptown Kingston that creates a bridge to access health care for artists. O+ aims to embody a state of complete physical, mental and social well-being through a coalition of health care providers, community resources with the artists in a shared vision to nurture the body and soul."
"The O Positive Festival is a celebration of art and music in Uptown Kingston that creates a bridge to access health care for artists. O+ aims to embody a state of complete physical, mental and social well-being through a coalition of health care providers and community resources with the artists in a shared vision to nurture the body and soul."
ReplyDeleteO+ is stylistically the way we need to write it, for consistency's sake, and, because associate-wise, when you read it you pronounce "O Positive" which is good, and when you see it, you don't think "Positive test results" which is bad. O+. OK all? That's important.
ReplyDeleteAgreed about the date. Great if we want to have it the same time every year but that's about marketing, not mission. No one else includes it, let's not either.
ReplyDeleteThis second sentence has it all but is super long and confusing. Maybe we should trust everyone knows what health's definition is, and if they don't, they can look it up at the WHO. i've left it in tho because everyone seems to be a fan despite its length.
basics in statements of all kinds - don't "aim," just do.
also the "with the artists" is confusing.
"The O+ Festival is a celebration of art and music in Uptown Kingston that creates a bridge to access health care for artists. O+ embodies a state of complete physical, mental and social well-being by uniting artists with a coalition of health care providers and community resources, in a shared vision to nurture the body and soul."
COMMENTS ON MY FINAL DRAFT:
ReplyDeleteAt second glance, "embodies a state" sounds a little... supernatural. And grammar-wise, access should follow not precede health care.
"Exemplify" ("to represent and manifest") is like "embody", but more direct. The final "in a shared vision" phrase is ALMOST redundant to our inclusion of the definition of health, less so w/ individual & community as opposed to the standard but friendly cliché of "body & soul."
Things to consider:
ReplyDelete1) A date is not included in the mission statement unless it is a strategic advantage. Columbus Day weekend can be the most visited 3 day weekend in the Hudson Valley because of the turning foliage. Do we want to have our festival during a time when so many visit the Hudson Valley? If so it should be included, otherwise it is best to leave it out.
2) Our URL and name is O Positive Festival, though it is good to have O+ Festival in the title of our HTML pages for easier searching, I would recommend we include our name in our literature and announcements.